Reflection to Draft #1 and Draft #2

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In my first draft, my writing seemed choppy and it did not have an ending. My story did not seem to make sense because of all the different events I tried to add in the story. My peer wrote that I was too brief with the experiences I tried to include in my story and I wanted to change that. A learning objective that I had already acquired in my last draft was conventions.

In my second draft, I believe sentence fluency is more prominent. My ideas are more thought out instead of just being thrown in crazily. I need to work on the writing process a bit more because I am forgetting to proofread. I also included an actual person to my writing because in my first draft, there seemed to be an absence to the prompt.

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